[Main Blog Post] More Rough "All Father" Prayers

[jprussell]

I've put together four more tries at the "All Father" prayer. I'm getting closer, but still not totally happy with what I have, so even more so than usual, I welcome and ask for comments on how these might be stronger.

Thank you if you feel called to share!

Comments

Re: Another attempt

[jprussell]

Nice! Much better than my clumsy attempt at a rework.

Re: Another attempt

[k_a_nitz]

Actually I prefer your attempt!

Re: Another attempt

[jprussell]

Well, thanks, but I think mostly that's just further evidence that there's something to poetry (and fiction, and RPGs, and visual art, and...) where there's "something" about others' creations that you can't get out of your own work.