[Main Blog Post] More Rough "All Father" Prayers

[jprussell]

I've put together four more tries at the "All Father" prayer. I'm getting closer, but still not totally happy with what I have, so even more so than usual, I welcome and ask for comments on how these might be stronger.

Thank you if you feel called to share!

Comments

[k_a_nitz]

Oops, I read that as the first stressed syllable of the second line - my bad. And I obviously lost count of the lines! And I messed up rhyme with alliteration - serves me right for doing this while listening in on a work meeting!